2024届高考英语二轮复习书面表达专项练习18 未来与理想话题指导
2024届高考英语二轮复习书面表达复习专题18 未来与理想话题指导
实例指导1—未来资讯报道
【写作任务】
假设现在是2024年，你是China Daily的一名记者，请你根据下面的采访记录写—篇资讯报道。
注意：要求词数：120-150。报道的格式已经给出，不计入总词数。
Xichang，Sichuan，Sep．25(Xinhua)－___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【写作指导】
1．了解资讯报道的篇章结构，确定本文的结构和写作内容。
资讯报道类写作的篇章结构一般包括：1)主题内容(句)：一般文章的首句较长，要报道事件的时间、地点、人物、主要事件；2)详细分析事件发生过程：按照时间先后顺序，详细介绍事件发展过程，其中可以穿插一些重要人物的评论和观点；3)概括总结该事件的结局，或总结事件的重大意义和影响；如果还没有明确的的结果，就要点明“正在调查或有待进一步调查”。
本文的写作就可按照上面介绍的篇章结构进行谋篇布局：1)第一句介绍主题：中国于2024年9月25晚9点10分在四川省西昌卫星发射中心成功发射嫦娥4号载人宇宙飞船。2)详细介绍具体情况，可以按照时间顺序，包括：三名宇航员搭载飞船，实现人们登月的梦想，登月后的活动(采集研究月球表面的岩石和土壤：安装设备，建立空间站)；党和国家领导人做祝贺和鼓励的讲话等等。3)介绍事情的重大意义和结局，如：标志着中国科技和太空研究的重大突破；使得中国为继美国后第二个成功登月的国家；坚定了人们发展科技、探测太空，服务于人类的信心。
2．分析资讯报道的语言特点，选定本文的信息表达词句。
资讯报道类文章的用词准确，有时要用到专业术语，语句一般都很长，大都为结构复杂的复合句，以便包含大量精确的信息。根据这尸特点，选定该文章的表达词句如下：
【学生习作】
【教师点评】
1． 亮点点击：该文章表达信息全面，结构基本符合资讯报道的特点和要求。另外，该资讯报道的语言准确，使用了一些结构稍复杂的句式，表达了丰富的信息，尤其是文章首句点出主题，概括性强，如：China successfully launched its another manned spacecraft at 9:10 p.m. on Sept. 25, 2024.文章还使用了非谓语动词结构作状语，表现了作者扎实的语言运用能力和娴熟的表达技巧，例如：The launch marks a major breakthrough in China's space program, making China the second nation, after America in the world, to walk on the Moon.
2．误点点拨：①处的come true为不及物动词短语，不能接宾语，要改成realize。②处的encourage andcongratulate等动词使用不准确，如果和前面的谓语动词made并列，则要改成过去式；如果改成含有现在分词短语的复合结构就好了，如：offering his encouragement and congramlations to those who…。
3．画龙点睛： 文章的主题句之后的信息，改成一个简单句更显简练，如：Three Chinese astronauts on baord will help Chinese people to relaize their dream of space-walk on the moon。2） 文章的末段表达成功发射的意义，如果其中一部分放到介绍完领导讲话之后，就不显得这么集中了。
【参考范文】
Xichang，Sichuan，Sep．25(Xinhua)－China successfully launched its another manned spacecraft, Chang'e-4 at 9:10 p.m. on Sept. 25, 2024. The three Chinese astronauts on board will help Chinese people to realize their dream of space-walk on the Moon.
The state and party leader delivered an important'speech, offering his encouragement and
congratulations to those who have devoted all their time to the exploring of and researching into the space.
The launch marks a major breakthrough in China's space program, making China the second nation, after America in the world, to walk on the Moon. If it goes smoothly, more research will be attempted including collecting rocks and soil on the Moon for later study. Furthermore. the astronauts will fix some equipment there for later use to set up space stations.
We have great confidence that China is capable of making further exploration
实例指导2—Life In the Future
写作任务:
你校要举行一次英语演讲比赛,话题是"畅想未来生活,享受人生欢乐"。假设你已报名,请用英语写一份120-150词的演讲稿,准备参加比赛。你可以从科技发展给人们未来的生活、学习和工作带来的影响,以及如何准备迎接挑战,适应新生活等方面展开描述和讨论。
注意:演讲稿的开头和结尾已给出,但不计入总词数。
That’s all. Thank you!
分析:
1. 仔细审题,明确任务。本写作任务要求根据提示话题和主要信息写一份演讲稿,属于描述类的应用文。演讲稿的最大特点是其很强的实用性,这也是该类文章写作的最基本的要求。由此,该类文章的篇章结构和语言表达显得尤为重要,它们除了要显示作者基本的语言基础知识外,还要能很好地体现作者的逻辑思维和表达能力。为了便于口头表达,该类文章的语句不要过于复杂,要尽量使用口语化的语言,这样读起来顺口,听起来也容易理解。
2. 根据提示,确定要点。该演讲的主要话题首先要对"未来的生活、学习和工作等情况"加以想象和描述,并根据题目提示的"科技发展给未来生活、学习和工作带来的影响",简要说明其原因。文章的第二个主要内容是要表达"如何准备迎接挑战,适应新生活",这也是个人观点和看法的表达。要认真分析未来生活变化给我们带来的机遇和挑战,作为未来世界的主人,我们应该怎样做,等等。
3. 遣词造句,灵活表达。根据审题所得,将要表达的有效信息用灵活的句式表达出来,如:
1) 作为演讲内容的总括和概述,也是文章的主题句,开篇可以表达"科技发展给未来生活、学习和工作带来很大的影响"。可以运用如下几个句式:
Thanks to the great development in science and technology, we are sure to live a happier and more wonderful life in the future. 或The great development in science and technology will have a great effect on the future of our lives, work and study.等。
2)仔细分析未来生活及其巨大变化时,可以从人们的衣食住行以及学习、工作等方面加以分析与描述,可以运用not only ... but also ...等来连接这些变化,例如:Not only will we be provided with enough food and clothing, we can also spend more time traveling around the world and enjoying other amusements.以及We will have less stress in the future, either from our study or from the work.等。
3) 在发挥个人观点,叙述"准备迎接挑战,适应新生活"的建议时,可以表达为:We should work harder today, making preparations to make more contributions to the development of the future society and the world.等。
4. 巧妙过渡,自然衔接。将表达的信息用一些过渡词或短语连接成文,注意逻辑思维和行文的连贯。可以借鉴的表达有:further more, however, therefore, only in this way等。
1. 初稿的文章结构完整,谋篇布局合理,内容表达比较全面,语句间使用了一些过渡和衔接词语,如besides、how-ever等,表达句式有几处还算精彩,如长句As we all know, ..., so ...以及由连词not only ... but also ...连接的并列句等的使用,表明作者有一定的英语表达能力。
2. 文章存在的问题:
①部分表达词句过于随意,没有经过认真的思考和组织,甚至是按照汉语的表达习惯来安排句子结构的,例如:We will be provided not only with enough food and clothing, but also more convenience of traveling and living.第二个分句中缺少介词with,句子显得就不对称,也不完整。再如,在... we will have less stress both from our study and from work, because we can work and study in a more efficient way. 一句中,both ... and ... 就不如用either ... or ...表达得更准确。
②文章的思想性不强,或者说思想格调比较低。特别是文章的结尾,谈到未来生活的打算和建议时,仅仅满足于个人的利益,如:develop more skills and earn more money以及enjoy a more interesting and colorful life even when we are old.等显得作者思想很狭隘,没有达到一定的思想境界。
成稿:
Hello, everyone! I am glad to be able to give a talk about the future life and study here. Thanks to the great development in science and technology, we are sure to live a happier and more wonderful life in the future. Not only will we be provided with enough food and clothing, we can also spend more time traveling around the world and enjoying other amusements. It will make our spare time more interesting and colorful. Furthermore, we will have less stress either from our study or from the work 实例指导3—一千年之后
【写作任务】
科技在高速发展，人类在不断进步。那么，一千年之后我们的生活会是什么样子呢?请你充分展开想象，描述未来1000年后人类的生活。
词数：120—150。
注意：开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
What may life be like on the earth in 1,000 years'time ?
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So I believe that the simple and effective life in the future will be much better than it is now.
【写作指导】
仔细审题，确定文章的体裁。
本文是一篇描述性的说明文，要求你展开想象对未来生活进行描述。
2．确定文章的人称和时态
本文可以第一人称为主，叙述自己的经历或感受；也可以第三人称为主介绍未来生活的情况，文章可以一般现在时或一般将来时为主。
3．根据要点，列出提纲。
根据讨论情况列出提纲，并运用恰当的语句表达出来。注意要保证文章通顺、流畅，结构完整。
本文的篇章结构可以设置如下：
第一节：提出问题——未来生活是什么样子的；
第二节：具体描绘你想象中未来生活的样子；
第三节：总结全文。
【参考范文】
What may life be like on the earth in 1.000 years’s time ?
Supposing we are now in the year 3009, and we are going to travel to the Sahara from China. Do we need to book a ticket or should we bring enough food and water supplies? No. All that we need to do is to send everything into the computer and then get it out from the computer right at the destination. But how does that come about? It is done by the space tunnel .It is the development oftechnol ogy that makes it possible for human beings to travel everywhere.
Robots will be even more popular. As a result, human beings will free themselves from the physical work. But the most exciting thing is that no one will suffer from illness because there are no more diseases.
So I believe that the simple and effective life in the future will be much better than it is now
实例指导4— 月球旅行
【写作任务】
假如你要去月球旅行，那么，在月球上的衣食住行都需要进行特殊的设计。本次写作任务是要求你充分发挥自己的想象力，就自己这次旅行中可能遇到的问题提出解决的方案。
【教师点评】
本篇习作中作者根据写作提示和要点基本完成了写作任务。丈中作者使用了许多较为高级的词汇、短语，及较复杂句式。此外，文中还使有了一些连接词语如but，besides等，使得文章流畅、完整，体现了作者具有一定的语言运用能力。
当然，本文在行文中也有一些英、汉表达和词语使用等方面的错误，建议修改如下：
语法错误，应改为As we all know或As is known to all…。
实例指导5—How to describe your future life form
【写作任务】
某校学生会对在校学生就“未来理想的工作”这一问题做了一份调查，下表显示了调查结果。
介绍图表的全部内容并发表你的自己的看法。
注意：词数120左右。
【思路指导】
对于未来和理想的描述，一方面可以开拓你丰富的想象力为你的未来运筹帷幄，激发学习的动力，另一方面也会增加我们现在生活的珍惜。需要注意以下几点：
要用适当的句子引出你对未来的憧憬，切忌一开始就大谈理想和未来。
时态要以将来时态为主。
描述要详略得当，避免平均用力。
不要过于句式单一，要增加一定的说理性。
【范文欣赏】
The chart above shows us what kind of job the students prefer to do when they grow up. More than 25 percent of the students want to be a boss and about 25 percent of the students want to be a government official in the future.
While over 15 percent of the students are in favour of being a lawyer. The least number of students, less than 5 percent would like to become stars and slightly more than ten percent of them would like to be teachers. Nearly 15 percent of the students want to choose other jobs.
So many people want to be an official. Maybe we can get better service from the government. In my opinion, no matter what job the students would like to do it in the future, they should think about
making contributions to other people and to our country,
实例指导6----你是否愿意成为师范生写作任务: 今年,教育部直属师范大学将招收一批免费师范生,学生毕业后须回生源所在省份的中小学任教十年以上。你班同学就此在英语课上进行了一次主题为"你是否愿意成为一名免费师范生"的讨论,请你为此次讨论写一篇120-150词的发言稿。
分析:
1. 本写作任务给出了话题,同时也对体裁做出了要求,写作前一定要注意审清题目要求,要注意发言稿的用词和风格。
2. 审题之后,首先要明确提出自己的观点:愿意成为免费师范生或是不愿意成为免费师范生；然后根据自己所持的观点列出自己的理由,这时最好能使用一些清晰表达逻辑结构的连接词或短语,如first, second, above all, 等等,使文章过渡自然、流畅,做到前后连贯、层次分明、有条不紊；最后,用一两句话对全文做一个简单的总结。
I have read about the news that students who want to teach in his or her hometown for at least 10 years can study at some colleges for free. If I had the chance, I would become a teacher in my hometown. Firstly, to be a teacher is my dream. When I was young I admired my teacher very much and I wanted to be a teacher in the future. Secondly, this policy is very good for us, for it is free. It is very expensive for me to have college education, especially because my parents are workers, so I want to help them to save money. Thirdly, I want to get the chance to serve the people in my hometown. All in all, I’m willing to teach the children and achieve my true value in my 成稿:
I’m glad to hear the news that our government will help students study at some colleges for free if they are willing to teach in their hometowns for at least 10 years after graduation. I hope I can get such a chance to be a teacher. Firstly, to be a teacher is my dream. When I was still a kid, I admired teachers very much, and I hoped I myself could be a teacher someday. Secondly, I think I can benefit a lot from this policy, because it means that I can get a free college education. My parents are both workers and it is hard for them to earn money, so I hope I can save some money for them. Thirdly, it will be a good chance for me to work for the people in my hometown. All in all, I hope I can come back to teach the children in my hometown and try to achieve my own goals as well. And I believe there will be more and more qualified teachers working in remote areas in the near future.
Powerful sentences:
1. You should devote most of your time and energy to your career, if you have a suitable one.
2. In my opinion, the policy is good for students and our country, and will be of great help in improving the quality of education in rural areas.
3. As we all know, education plays a very important role in the development of a nation.
4. Hard work leads to success in one’s career, while laziness results in failure.
实例指导7---- My dream
