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Test3
Our declining environment may bring the people of the world together as no politician, philosopher, or war ever could.
Environmental problems are global in scope and respect no nations boundaries.
Therefore, people are faced with the choice of unity and cooperation on the one hand or disunity and a common tragedy on the other.
Cooperation---or Tragedy?
The solution to the worlds growing environmental problems may have to wait awhile. It has been said that environmental problems are global and respect no nations boundaries.
Unfortunately, pollution and its consequences still fall to large measure on those least likely to do anything about it: poor countries willing to sacrifice anything in order to sit at the table with the worlds wealthy.
As far as the industrialized nations of the world are concerned, the world is a big place. Environmental destruction taking place outside their borders may sometimes be fodder for government pronouncements of concern, but few concrete actions.
Deforestation of the Amazon, for instance, is of vital concern to all those who wish to continue breathing. But the only effective deterrent to this activity,the restriction of international aid money to those countries showing net deforestation, has been stalled in the United Nations by those unwilling to interfere in the internal politics of other nations.
Because of the differential impact of polluting activities around the world, and even in different regions of a single country, many governments will undoubtedly continue to promulgate only modest environmental regulations.
Costs to polluting companies will continue to carry as much weight as the benefit of a pollution-free environment. Particularly in the current political climate of the United States, the well-documented expense of todays pollution-control measures will be stacked against the unknown long-term effects of polluting actitivities.
Why should I spend millions of dollars a year, which causes me to have to raise the cost of my goods or eliminate jobs, if no one really knows if air pollution is all that harmful?
Show me the proof, an air polluting company may demand.
Realistically,it wont be until critical mass is achieved that the hoped for choice of unity and cooperation will be a viable one.
Only when the earth as a whole is so polluted that life itself becomes increasingly difficult for a majority of the worlds people will there likely be the political will to force global environmental laws on governments worldwide.
But the optimists among us continue to believe that the world can be shown the error of its ways.
They continue to point out that the sky is probably falling--or at least developing a big hole.
The world, as a whole, ignores them.
One would hope, however, that governments, perhaps through a strengthened U.N., could somehow be forced to realize that when the Earth reaches the critical mass of pollution, it may be too late to do anything about it.
That would be a common tragedy indeed.
评价
This excellent response displays an in-depth analysis of the issue and superior facility with language.
While acknowledging that environmental problems are serious and of global dimensions, the essay explores the complexity of international cooperation.
Such cooperation, the essay argues, runs into a variety of problems, and the writer offers persuasive examples to support that point:
-- the unwillingness of nations to interfere with other nations through political measures such as restriction of foreign aid
-- inadequate environmental regulations, which are caused both by the differential impact of polluting activities between countries and regions and by the difficulty of comparing the long-term effects of polluting actitivities with the more easily documented, short-term costs of reducing pollution.
The essay distinguishes itself in part by its excellent organization.
The first paragraph analyzes the claim and announces the writers position; the second and third paragraphs provide clear examples supporting that position.
The skillful use of a quotation from a business person vividly illustrates the economic impact of pollution controls.
The last two paragraphs bring a sense of closure to the essay by continuing the theme announced in the first paragraph -- that cooperation must wait until more dire circumstances produce the political will necessary to reduce pollution.
The essay exhibits superior control of grammar and syntax, with only minor errors.
Transitional phrases -- because, however, for instance -- help guide the reader through the argument.
Also, effective sentence variety and the use of precise word choice help confirm the score of 6.
At no other time then in our present time has the need for unity and togetherness been more necessary to the inhabitants on our planet.
For many decades the motto has been one of waste and denial.
The world is in a race - racing to become number one - racing to destroy the earth.
Traditions of protecting the earth have been abandoned as the need to satisfy infantile needs and desires wins out over the more philosophical desires of thought and meaning.
Unfortunately many do not see the need for reforms in actions and thought; people are living for today and not tomorrow.
Those that can believe in a future, and exhibit a desire to make a difference in this future must find a way to influence the remaining masses, and often it seems that the world simply refused to listen or learn from its past mistakes.
Those that answer this calling will not do so for notiority, but instead for their beliefs that they can make a difference.
They will need to be of strong heart, body, soul, and beliefs. Understanding the need for an overhaul in our system in the rampant abuses is the first step to obtaining advancement in the struggle to bring the world together in a way that will benefit mankind today and tomorrow.
For too many years Americans have persuaded themselves that the envirnoment was in no danger.
Every year laws have been passed to protect our land, animals, and even our people.
More often than not there are loopholes in these laws, allowing the environment to remain in peril.
It seems that we often forget that we are not the only ones on earth.
We are only a small percentage, and much too often our actions have a great effect on those that must subsist on this earth as well.
One threatening example of this is the depletion of the rain forests in the Central and South Americas.
It seems difficult for Americans to understand how these people can destroy their natural landscapes.
Not only is the landscaped destroyed and the invaluable plants and animal life are also destroyed, and these can never be recovered.
Americans express their annoyance at such practices, failing to see that we as consumers are one of the main causes of such actions.
As a consumer society we depend on wood and other materials from these areas. Unfortunately these areas are nothing like what we see at home, instead it is a world of unimaginable poverty and harshness.
In these areas where poverty is so prevalent often the only means of survival is found through the clearing of the precious rain forest for farm land.
Certainly the fact that these people are farming in order to maintain their survival is important and can not be over looked.
Yet, in most cases the farming is not done as a means of raising food and livestock for their own uses.
This land is usually used to grow food for other countries such as America.
This scenario depicts the wickedness that has become of our world.
The first world nations are destroying the second and third world nations in order to fuel our excessive desires.
The world must find a way to come together so that there will be a tomorrow for everyone.
New legislation must be passed that protects not only the environment of America, but the environments of other countries.
Big business must also realize that they can no longer use dirty legislation and kickbacks to continue to pollute the earth.
Another important aspect that people must learn is that if we cannot learn to recycle and reduce waste, one day we will run out of dumping ground.
It is frightening to think that this is what it will to take to make most people realize that actions must be taken to clean up our earth.
It seems that we will only be able to come together when there is not other alternative.
Perhaps the must unfathomable thought is, what happens if people do not unite together now to protect our environment.
It can only seem that we will once again be threatened with war as we fight each other to death over the last precious miles of land and food.
Civilization will have come full circle; all of our technological and scientific advances will mean nothing if the earth is destroyed and mankind subsequently wiped out with it
评价
This is a generally well-developed essay that examines the complexities of the issue and demonstrates good control of the elements of effective writing.
The writer strongly agrees with the topics claim and uses the first paragraph to expand on the idea that environmental problems imperil the earth.
These problems, according to the writer, derive from peoples lack of maturity and lack of foresight
The third paragraph provides a highly relevant example of the complexities involved in the issue, showing how damage to the rainforest can be attributed both to poverty in Latin America and to the voracious appetite of the wealthy North American consumer society.
From here the writer returns to the focus on planning for tomorrow and proposes a specific remedy
The essay closes with a passionate description of a negative scenario for the future.
The response is well organized but, unlike a 6 essay, does not sustain a tight focus.
Although the example of the rain forest degradation is highly relevant and fully developed, many of the reasons and assertions receive only cursory development or explanation .
The sentence structure in the essay is often nicely varied , but it is at times choppy
The vocabulary is generally well chosen, with words such as depletion, unfathomable, and subsequently.
However, the phrasing is at times imprecise, as in these examples: We are only a small percentage,and At no other time then in our present time has the need??? been more necessary????
Our declining environment may bring the people of the world together as no politician, philosopher, or war ever could.
Environmental issues are a growing concern in our country today.
It is an issue that concerns every person, no one is excluded.
Facing and solving environmental issues calls for unity and cooperation.
Prejudices should be put aside in this time of need.
Without unity our world as we know it will not exist in twenty-five years.
People as a whole need to take action.
Without unity and cooperation little will be accomplished.
There are many environmental issues we are facing today.For example, recycling is a simple and effective way to help the environment.
If everyone did a small part the results would be enormous.
Recycling is a good example because it is something every single person is capable of doing.
There are many ways people of any age, race, or sex can contribute to help the environment.
Emissions testing for exhausts on automobiles is one way to help keep unnecessary pollutants from contaminating the air.
Very few cities require emissions testing for automobiles.
Columbus, for example, does not require emissions testing.
My small hometown of Amherst, Ohio does require this test.
I believe the government needs to implement stricter regulations regarding environmental issues and also increase the funding that is allotted for it.
Mandatory recycling laws with a stiff penalty for breaking the law is one solution.
Funding for groups to do research is imperative.
Without research there is very little we would know about anything including diseases and microorganisms.
People of the world need to understand the situation our generation and generations to come are faced with.
This understanding needs to come from education.
The United States has always been a forerunner in wars, peace talks, etc.
It is now time for the United States to be the leader in solutions to environmental concerns.
The greatest barrier in any situation is communication.
If we communicate with each other and work together instead of apart results would be seen.
Education is another great concern, especially in underdeveloped countries and third world nations.
There is a lack of education in many of these countries.
Education is the key to success.
In summary I would like to emphasize the importance in unity and cooperation on global concerns such as the environment.
Also education is very important in making headway.
I also believe the government should get more involved in these issues.
评价
This essay presents and supports an adequate analysis of the issue.
After stating the need for cooperation on the environment, the writer proposes several very specific remedies for environmental problems: recycling, emissions testing, research, education, and communication.
The detailed description of emissions testing is useful; however, the other remedies are not developed fully or persuasively.
In some areas the essay suffers from needless repetition.
Paragraph six, for example, moves from education to communication and back to education.
The conclusion, moreover, adds little, merely repeating earlier statements.
The control of grammar and usage is generally competent, but the sentences tend to be choppy.
Although most of the ideas are stated clearly, the relationship between the ideas is not always made clear: Also education is very important in making headway.
I also believe the government should get more involved in these issues.
WORKING TOGETHER FOR EACH OTHER AND THE ENVIRONMENT
Our Environment, if we take care of it, it will take care of us.
CFCs destroying the ozone layer, hundreds of acres of the rain forest being destroyed daily, smog-infested air to breathe, global warming, world population increasing at an exponential rate, these are but a few of the things that we need to not only think about, but find ways to deal with them.
We are not given this world by our ancestors we are borrowing it from our children and our childrens children.
We spend so much time trying to fix other countries problems, when we should be incorporating them in working toward solving the environmental issues.
